Vampire Women, a short story

I avoid sexual topics on this blog, for reasons best encapsulated in the phrase “more trouble than it’s worth“. I’d love to live in a world where a conversation about the diversity of human experience need not be approached with trepidation, but sadly, in the real world it does tend to bring out the irrational in people.

Today I’d like to lift the veil ever so slightly and share a short story I wrote in 2009. It includes the only sex scene I’ve ever written, and I’m actually quite proud of it. If you know me at all, you’ll expect a twist.

I published the story on, which I’ve written about before. Ficly was a site where people wrote stories in 1000 characters or less, but it has recently closed its doors — the archive is still there but you can no longer publish anything new. A new site, Ficlatté, has succeeded it, but it’s not much to look at so far.

OK, here goes…


Vampire Women

They say that if a vampire bites you, you become one. My story is sort of like that.

It began with a walk by the lake, with calm water lit by the setting sun. She lay on the grassy bank, and as I approached she smiled and invited me to lie beside her for a while. One rarely meets a woman so incautious of a strange man’s company, and I liked the boldness in her character as much as the beauty of her form.

I’ve always enjoyed that sensation of being absorbed, of surrendering control, and without ever deciding to I lost myself in her body. All reality vanished from my mind, except for how perfectly she was shaped and how much pleasure she could give me. I don’t remember when we removed our clothes, but I remember how passionate we were, and how afterwards she whispered, in the sweetest possible tones, “You know, you don’t actually have a penis anymore. You’re like me now – beautiful, female, and not really human.”

I stroked my new breasts as the sun rose, wondering if I’d ever get used to being a woman.


What do you think? Should I take up writing erotic fiction? :-)

I won’t call it erotic fiction, though, because that would imply that its purpose is to arouse the reader. It might — and if it does that’s a happy bonus — but it is not the main point of the story. A more interesting criterion is whether it achieves what Terry Pratchett has said fantasy ought to do, which is to take something familiar and present it in a new way so that we’re almost seeing it for the first time.

(You might also infer that I have some opinions about the dangerous and offensive lie that there is something called “masculinity” which men should endeavour to acquire as much of as possible, and you would be correct in that inference. This doesn’t relate to the story directly, but I doubt someone with conservative views on gender differences could have written it.)

It received positive comments on Ficly, among them: “Well, that IS new!” and “Genderqueer powers activate!”

The fact that it was assigned the index number 6666 amused me considerably at the time. It simply means that it was approximately the 6666th story to be published on the site, but you can well imagine that the sort of person who might be superstitious about a row of sixes might also be the sort to consider the story morally depraved . . .

I wrote it in response to a challenge in which participants were prompted with the instruction that “your character wakes up one morning to find that his/her body has been significantly altered“. I wasn’t the only person to write about an involuntary sex change; here’s a link to a very different, more comic, take on the subject by a participant called Harry Hood, to which I wrote a sequel. (Let’s just say I sensed that Harry’s protagonist might be a touch misogynist, and so was inspired to write a sequel in which he gets called out for it. Follow the links to read.)

4 Responses to “Vampire Women, a short story”

  1. Stan Carey Says:

    I liked it. The phrase “not really human” is put to very good effect, wrapping all sorts of implications up in something seemingly offhand. I enjoyed the other stories too, Harry’s and your sequel; then I read the last Ficly blog post for background on its demise.

  2. Adrian Morgan Says:

    Thanks, Stan. I appreciate your endorsement. The “not really human” line takes us back to the vampirism reference and clarifies that the protagonist will be empowered to convert other men. That raises the question of how a skilled writer might handle the task of writing a sequel; perhaps the most challenging part would be portraying the necessary psychological transformation in a believable way. I’m content to let the reader imagine it.

    I like to think my sequel to Harry’s story might bring a welcome smile to those women who have suffered personal abuse online, and I love the comment from OneMoreDay that reads: “Yes! Score two for the stupid old witch!” That’s precisely the reaction I was aiming for.

  3. Stan Carey Says:

    By implications I meant that the vampire mythos has diversified hugely, and every few years seems to bring about a popular new reimagining of the monster. So at once it invites speculation even at a basic friend-or-foe level. I’m glad it went down well with the Ficly community too; its contents and mood are both quite dreamlike.

  4. Adrian Morgan Says:

    I’m not particularly well versed in vampire fiction, so a reader who comes at it from that angle might see possibilities I didn’t think of. For me, the analogy with vampirism was just a useful way to concisely convey the core idea of the plot.

    Dreamlike is one way of putting it. Immersive has also been suggested. I certainly tried to tap into that subdued state of awareness between alertness and sleep, wherein everything is possible and nothing is consequential.

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